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THE GIRLS FROM ALCYONE II: FREELANCER
Continuing from last week's snippet: Sigrid has just infiltrated the grounds of a factory complex on Bellatrix on a mission for her mistress, the Lady Hitomi Kimura.
The rain fell heavier now making the muddy ground soft and slick under Sigrid's feet. Ahead of her stood another sealed metal gate, complete with tower and guards.
Sigrid walked quickly, clinging to the shadows, careful not to disturb the standing water in the larger puddles that were already forming into lakes. The guards would not see her, shrouded as she was, so effective was the cloak that her mistress had equipped her with. But Sigrid knew a simple splash could raise the alarm as easily as the guards' motion-trackers or infrared.
She doubted the men at the gate would take much notice anyway. Even without her enhanced sensors she could see they were bored, their sullen faces staring out into the gloom or down at their sodden feet, busying themselves by counting the minutes until the end of their shift. Not once did they bother to scan the grounds, and they seemed even less interested in walking a patrol.
Which was really too bad, Sigrid thought, because she was exactly the kind of thing they should be looking for.
Hehe - how convenient! Love that last line :)
ReplyDeleteThe last line made me smile. I get the feeling they may not be bored for much longer, though.
ReplyDeleteJumping on the comment bandwagon - the last line was great. Some nice details - really gave me a strong visual of the scene. I'm hoping Sigrid brought a can of kick butt along too. Great Snippet!
ReplyDeleteActually, Sigrid IS the can of kick-butt (whoop-ass would also suffice).
DeleteHaha! Good help, these days... I tell ya....
ReplyDeleteI am also a fan of the last line!
Too bad for the factory owners, maybe. Not for her! (I'm at my usual place at JarnianConfederation. Thought I'd signed up.)
ReplyDeleteWhy do I get the feeling that the reason the guards aren't more vigilant is because the have a secondary (or primary) line of defense that is laying in wait? Hmmm. Good stuff!!
ReplyDeleteMaybe even a camouflaged pit, with big pointy spikes, that she might stumble into! I bet it's probably that. ;)
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ReplyDeleteIt always looks so ominous when you delete a comment. (what did he say? what did he say?)
DeleteI actually LOL'd to this. Thank you for that.
DeleteGreat details in this snippet, but as stated by others, it's the last line that's really impactful. Makes for a great moment.
ReplyDeleteI love her thoughts in this snippet and the description of how she moves and thinks. Great insight into her character!
ReplyDeleteNice snippet! I like the setting description, and the glimpse into Sigrid's thoughts. And yes, the last sentence is awesome. Very effective.
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